"It's About Time In September" By Nintenbrony

Okay everypony, this is my first fan ficiton I ever made. There was this contest to base a fan fiction off of "September" by TheLivingTombstone.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OSZlAltkYoc

The contest had two categories: Normal fan fiction and grimdark fan fiction. I had good ideas for a story, but I didn't know how to do it without going grimdark! So, I decided to go for the grimdark part. I want to know what everypony thinks about it!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1K6mKdETbAdl6sGJdPaJ_hCehM0rTjB0IVsUBx1oJ4bI/edit

It was well made and i love it. References to the series but making it your own was a good touch, but i raise the question how did twilight warn herself if she was dead? I don't know maybe I'm over analyzing this. Altogether a great short story.
Your better then me for sure.

Gasp! A contradiction! I never thought of that! and I thought I covered every flaw!

lol i not a grammatical reader but i read purely for story and understanding

Okay, I've onced over it! Go ahead and check out the corrections I've made.

I posted it to FIM Fiction, and it is a hit! There are still a few punctuation problems here-and-there, but hey, Cupcakes had a TON compared to this!

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/36744/It%27s-About-Time-In-September